Based on the excerpt, explain why it took many years for hamburgers to become popular in the United States. Support your answer with important and specific information from the excerpt.
(The excerpt was handed out on Monday: "The Pioneers" by Eric Schlosser and Charles Wilson.)
Think about what we have discussed in class, and utilize the rubric below to help evaluate the student's response. You must state whether the student should receive a 1, 2, 3, or 4 and explain why. Your evaluation must be at least 5 sentences long. You may respond to another classmate's post and tell whether or not you agree with their scoring and why or why not.
Your post is due no later than Friday at 5 pm.
The Student's Response
Scoring Guide and Sample
| Score | Description |
|---|---|
| (4) | The response is a clear, complete, and accurate explanation of why it took many years for hamburgers to become popular in the United States. The response includes important and specific information from the excerpt |
| (3) | The response is a mostly clear, complete, and accurate explanation of why it took many years for hamburgers to become popular in the United States. The response includes important but often general information from the excerpt. |
| (2) | The response is a partial explanation of why it took many years for hamburgers to become popular in the United States. The response includes limited information from the excerpt and may include misinterpretations. |
| (1) |
The response is a
minimal explanation of why it took many years for hamburgers to become
popular in the United States. The response includes little or no
information from the excerpt and may include misinterpretations.
OR
The response relates minimally to the task. |
| (0) | The response is totally incorrect or irrelevant, or contains insufficient evidence to demonstrate comprehension. |
I would give this response a 2.This response is somewhat clear but their are some grammatical and punctual errors.Also some of it was very confusing.Some of it is also spelled very messy.Also hard to read because words look like they are overlaping.
ReplyDeleteI think this student’s response to the MCAS question should get 2/3. I think this student wrote a nice essay response. The reason I might not give this student a 4 is because there were so many other details that the student could have used to support their answer. I also think that the student could have been more organized and used more of the space to fit more supporting details. There were some grammatical errors and it was messy handwriting. The first sentence of the response makes no sense. “It took so many years for hamburgers to become popular is that people put poison in their burgers.” Their topic sentence doesn’t even make sense!
ReplyDeleteemily good job at first I had to read the beginning sentence about 3 times before I could actually find out what it said and it made no sence to me at all!
DeleteI think that the student should get a two (2). The student wrote good details like how people were getting killed and thought that the meat was rotten. The response is kind of clear.
ReplyDeleteThe response isn't complete because they need more details. The student didn't write how the burger became famous. This response does not have a good topic sentence. There is no concluding sentence.
I think that is a really good reasoning to give the person a 2
DeleteI would give this student a 2 because he didn't really put too much supporting details. It was a little hard to read and if I were an MCAS person I would of gave him a lower grade because of his handwriting.If he would of put more info I would of gave him a 3 or 4.His first sentence didn't even make sense.(“It took so many years for hamburgers to become popular is that people put poison in their burgers.”)So if I were to grade him I would of gave him a 2.
ReplyDeleteI would give this open response a two. The person who wrote this wasn't clear enough and, didn't give any details. the first reason it is not clear is the topic sentence, it reads " It took so many years for hamburgers to become popular is because.." The student didn't have to include the is, that's what made it confusing. There were a lot of other details he left out two. For instance, "butchers used the leftover meat to grind into hamburger meat, so people prefer there meat solid.
ReplyDeleteI think that the person who wrote the open response deserves a two(2) because one reason is they gave one
ReplyDeletequote on why it took so long for hamburgers to become popular in the U.S.A. Also, they only gave one supporting detail from the story. He didn't restate the question in the start of their response. Lastly,I think that they could have gotten a better grade if they had explained why it took so long for hamburgers to become popular.
I would give this person a 2. The reason I think this person deserves a 2 is because he/she gave parts of the story for examples but didn’t explain. He/She didn’t tell how they got the evidence and never backed the evidence up. I found the first sentence was very confusing and made no sense because they did not check for proper grammar. I think I would've given this person a 3 if they explained there evidence or backed it up better.
ReplyDeleteIf I had to give this person an evaluation for they’re essay on The Pioneers I would give them a 2. The first sentence of the essay is very hard to understand because they said, “It took so many years for the hamburger to become popular is that people put poison in their burgers.” In this sentence the writer should have started with a hook, also that they did not word the sentence correctly, they should have written, “The reason why it took so many years for the hamburgers to become popular is that at first, people put poison in their burgers.” It was a good thing that the writer added a quote from the passage and told which paragraph it was in. Lastly, they also didn’t have a conclusion sentence in their essay at all. Clearly, this person should have proofread this response before they turned it in so they could have gotten a higher grade.
ReplyDeleteI would give this student’s response a 2. There was some supporting details but there was a lot of grammatical errors. First, in the beginning sentence the students says “ It took so many years for hamburgers to become popular is that people put poison in their burgers.” The student didn’t word this sentence correctly. They had some evidence but they should’ve proofread it before writing it. Second, the student had some supporting details but some of them didn’t say what paragraph or where they were in the story. Finally, the students conclusion was unclear. The student didn’t wrap up his response with a good conclusion. Clearly, this response had some supporting details, and a lot of grammatical errors. This student should have proofread his response before writing it.
ReplyDeleteI would give the student a 3 because there were some supporting details and there were a lot of mistakes and some of there sentences did not make sence but they put a lot of thought into this. they had good sentences and its a good paragraph but they should have proofread before they wrote it and they should have read it at least two times to them selves or to someone else.
ReplyDeleteI think this paragraph should deserve an 2. The reason i chose an 2 is because it could add more details and there not much to prove her statement. The passage could be longer. The student could of put much more facts about why people wouldn't eat hambugers. And thats why i think it deservs and 2.
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